Hi Everybody!
We are from Yakutsk. Our team consists of Dyachkovskaya Marina, Iovlev Marat, Lipskaya Ulya and Efremova Zhetta.So we want to introduce us:
Zhetta is a very beatiful like Bratz dolls girl .
Marat is the one unique and charming guy in our group.
Ulya is a shy and sweet girl.
Marina is a very gentle and wonderful girl.
We are very intresting in this project because it's a new experience for our study. We hope that this project will help improve our language and we are very glad that we take part in this project.
Paragraph Writing "USA Presidential Campaign" from the document "Debate Transcript" Deadline Sunday October 19, 2008 midnight Yakutsk time
Team Roles:
Marina D., starter for the first key sentences in the paragraph (2-3 sentences) for introductory part.
Marat, the key paragraph 1 writing (Barack Obama)
Ulia, the key paragraph 2 writing (John McCain)
Zhetta, the wrapper, writing a conclusion consisting of 2-3 sentences according to the introductory part
We want to discuss one of the most interesting question in pre-election race in America: What development of ways relationships with Iraq can offer candidates to president. It’s very important theme for both candidates because after terrorist action even 9/11. Of course candidates want to improve relationship with Iraq. (Marina Dyachkovskaya)
John McCain is sure, that Iraq is very dangerous for United States. And such country like Iraq is nearly to disintegration. Just democratic countries can help Iraq and change this terrible situation in country. For example he things that with situation in Iraq can help democratic countries like Germany, France.
What about a terrible situation in Iraq we mean poverty, unemployment, high level concentration of the weapon. (Marat Iovlev)
Barack Obama believes that Iraq is dangerous because there are many terrorist actions there. And it's nessesary find them and then Iraq's position will become better but it must be done very quickly. And neighbouring country Iran can help them. (Ulia Lipskaya)
So, making a conclusion we learned all sides of two nominates to president about talking Iran attitudes with USA. This question could have a great influence for security of this country and the world.(Zhetta Efremova)
Comments (5)
Katr said
at 5:36 am on Oct 8, 2008
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yo?
Larissa Olesova said
at 8:47 pm on Oct 12, 2008
Hi, team E. Larissa
Olya Yadreeva said
at 9:56 pm on Oct 13, 2008
We are the BEST!!!!!!!!=))))))))
Larissa Olesova said
at 5:12 pm on Oct 19, 2008
Group E, good topic to write about. Please, correct grammar in your paragraph: question type - the word order - verb and subject agreement, etc. Please, explain why this issue is interesting and important for both candidates in your introduction. Do not rely on obvious situation - some people do not know Iraq or the issues with this country. What political issues are between two countries and why both candidates included this part into their documents? Explain and open "terrible situation" - what is it in Iraq? What democratic countries you mean? Mention them. What are terrorist actions? Explain. Give or support all your arguments with examples. Rewrite and submit the updates by Sunday October 26 midnight Yakutsk time.
Larissa Olesova said
at 10:33 am on Oct 26, 2008
Hi, group E
Thank you for using your names for each part - it is clear how you manage your teamwork now. However, you should rewrite the paragraph by incorporating your changes into writing that it looks finished. Please, incorporate your answer into the writing by Wednesday October 29 by midnight Yakutsk time.
Please, correct grammar: questions type in the introduction, articles, punctuation after transitions, and pleae, try to avoid "so on" - it sounds incorrect in academic writing. Larissa
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